Melusine’s Children

Last week, I’ve been too busy to participate in the Friday Fictioneers challenge, I didn’t even manage to read other people’s stories. This week, I’m still stressed out, but I missed the weekly challenge so much that I just had to write something. It helps me to wind down.

The picture prompt for the Friday Fictioneers’ 100-word writing challenge was provided, as always, by the creative genius Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. You will find all the stories when you click on the Froggy. Please read, comment, and if you like join the fun. Everyone is welcome.

Image © Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

 Melusine’s Children

I’m on the floor and stare up to the chandelier. My heart is pounding.
Bob attached the carving after our wedding: an heirloom my nan gave me on my eighteenth’s birthday.
Now I’m ninety-nine, and Bob is long gone. I’ll be gone soon, too.
As I gasp for air, I see the tiny figure emerge from the flower in the centre.
“It’s time. Come home with me.”
“But I’ve made my choice.”
“My children have a second choice. Will you come?”
Will I? My life slips away. Faeries are immortal, but so is my love for Bob. If only…

(100 words)

Featured image:  „Heinrich Vogeler Melusine Triptychon 001“ von Heinrich Vogeler - Lizenziert unter Gemeinfrei über Wikimedia Commons -

29 thoughts on “Melusine’s Children

  1. This is a very nice flash fiction, which is my favorite form of fiction. I’m impressed that you were able to be so creative with the prompt — I’m afraid I’ve drawn a blank. Your work is wonderful! 🙂

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  2. Thank you, your words mean a lot to me. 🙂 I love the challenge of the changing prompts, and of being forced to only write the necessary. I find it good training. About the prompts: I often stare and have nothing. But then I think about what I would like to write and am lucky to find a way to tie it to the prompt. It doesn’t have to be an illustration, whatever is inspirational in the picture is great.

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  3. Have been meaning to find out about Melusine for ages so you’ve done me a favour.
    Have you ever read A.S. Byatt’s Possession? A literary mystery about two fictional Victorian poets, one of whom is obsessed with Melusine. I haven’t sold it very well – it’s a great read but I skipped lots of the poetry and meant to go back to it.
    I like the way you spell faerie! Faerie bargains generally have a hidden twist. Hate to say it, but I’d recommend Bob over the faeries, even though I do love the faeries and their tales!

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    1. No, I haven’t heard about Possession, but it sounds intriguing, I’ll check it out. I’m not a specialist on Melusin/e/a, I know the legend, and that there are many variations. I also noticed similarities to several fairy tales where a prince, merchant, hero, whatnot, wins a fairy princess either by trickery or heroism. She usually isn’t asked but gets married off. There’s usually a condition, like with Melusine’s husband, who isn’t allowed to watch her bathe. The ones in the fairy tales aren’t allowed to strike their wives, and they still do, just like Melusine’s hubby can’t help his curiosity. After the third time the wives leave them (rather relieved, I always thought, the bond of love always seemed quite one-sided to me). They sometimes come back to look after their children but never to the husband. I was wondering what happens to the kids, they’re half fae, after all. I thought they might get the choice to be fae or human, and so I put that option into this story. Faeries is the spelling I chose after someone in an earlier challenge pointed out the different ways it can be spelled. I like the faerie version. 🙂
      Now my reply is longer than the story.

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    1. I know the original quite well, and love it. It is cruel, and sad. I think you’re right, these tales all have more in common than the fish tale: Male, don’t be beguiled by woman. I didn’t do research for this, just wrote it down, but now, being curious, I found an interesting article about it:
      Fascinating, isn’t it? 🙂 Thanks for your interesting comment.


  4. Well done! When you had a little figure coming out of the rose in the center, I had to look back at the photo. I am so unobservant that I never noticed the rose! I have who at 99 said – I can’t understand why I’m still here! But I think the choice may not be ours to make…?

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