Field Trial – Friday Fictioneers Flash Fiction

Every Wednesday we get a new picture prompt for the Friday Fictioneers, a writing challenge graciously hosted by our Fairy Blog Mother Rochelle Wisoff-Fields.
The task of the challenge is to write a story: beginning, middle, and end, in 100 words or less. You can find all the Fictioneers’ stories when you click on the Froggy. Please read, comment, and if you like, join the fun. Everyone is welcome.


 

Image © Fatima Fakier Deria. Used with permission for this Friday Fictioneers Challenge only. Any other use of this image requires Fatima Fakier Deria’s permission.


Field Trial

With my eyes closed I remember last summer. How we lazed on the patio: you, me, and the kids.

When I open my eyes, I see blackness. The blackness of space is only surpassed by the blackness of my soul.

I killed you and the kids.

They let me choose between execution or The Program. Now I float here, naked in my special suit, with algae in my veins that are supposed to provide the oxygen I need. It worked for the rats in the lab. Out here without light? Not so great. Maybe there wasn’t a choice after all.

(100 words)


I pledge

Hello! Anyone remember me? It’s been a while… I stared at the pictures every week and nothing came. I began having doubts about ever having an idea again. Too much work, too much going on in my life. Yesterday I had an idea… but my writing feels rusty. But here you have it.

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57 thoughts on “Field Trial – Friday Fictioneers Flash Fiction

  1. I remember you! So glad to see you posting flash again. And whew, you came back with a zinger! Great twist from happy memory to horrific present, and wow, what a dire situation you paint — not just that the narrator ended up like that, but that whoever is in charge is free to force people to make such “choices”. Brrr — terrifying!

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  2. Gabriele! I am so excited to see you back! And with a whale of a good story. The idea of algae creeping around in my veins made me itch. Now I want to know how it’s done and how long he’ll last. You came back with a bang!!!

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    1. Alicia, you make me grin from ear to ear. Thank you! I’m not sure I’m back… but I hope so. Slowly, slowly, stories are creeping back into my head. I think they had a vacation. These algae… they were modified to work with animals, but how? Don’t ask me. 😉

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    1. Thank you. At first I didn’t know what you meant, but then it dawned on me that the story can indeed be interpreted that way even if that wasn’t my intent. Did I fail telling the story clearly? Probably. But with a short piece like this, various interpretations make things interesting. You’re absolutely right, seen this way, it is gut-wrenching.

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  3. Have you changed from drinking coffee to tea? You’re back with a vengeance with this one. Your narrator’s first image of lazing on the patio conjures such a fun family image, only to be followed and contrasted with a horrible current existence. There wasn’t a choice, and The Program/ algae bloodstream seems to have stolen your narrator’s feelings too – I would have expected more anger – they have been robbed of everything they once were.

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    1. Thank you, Sarah Ann. @Joy Pixley kicked my butt… I’m seriously contemplating joining Camp Nano again. Crazy, I know.
      I’m glad the story spoke to you. It was my intent to have the narrator be the bad person, but I now realize that the story can also be interpreted differently. That way, there should indeed be more anger.

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    1. LOL, Hello Crispina, and welcome. You should see my first drafts and the pain when I have to cut, and to cut, and to cut again. It’s a great exercise though, every word has to count. And it doesn’t always work out, like here, where more than one interpretation is possible. That also teaches me something. The main reason to be here is the company though. The Friday Fictioneers are such a friendly, welcoming and talented group, I participate whenever I can.

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  4. I read your story as the Program dictating all of the events, in revenge for some event which upset the Program. Perhaps your character will get rescued and then deal the Program a terminal blow. I certainly hope so.

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  5. I do that often – stare at the photo prompt and slink away until another is posted 😀 Welcome back and for a better life, sacrifices and ambitious innovative Programs will have to be undertaken. Right?

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    1. Thank you for your kind words, Dahlia. Yes, you’re absolutely right, programs are necessary, sacrifices as well. But these kinds of programs should be transparent, regulated and accountable. Using them instead of death penalty… not so much.

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  6. You’ve packed so much horror into this short tale…nicely done! The idea of being given a choice between something ‘old-fashioned’ and something experimental reminds me of an episode of Black Mirror called Black Museum. Welcome back!

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    1. Thank you Björn. 🙂 I’m very glad to be back and hope to be able to keep it up. I agree, I’d rather be dead, too. Unless this was something I wanted, agreed to, and was thoroughtly informed about.

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