It Cannot Be Wrong – Friday Fictioneers Flash Fiction

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Every Wednesday we get a new picture prompt for the Friday Fictioneers, a writing challenge graciously hosted by our Fairy Blog Mother Rochelle Wisoff-Fields.
The task of the challenge is to write a story: beginning, middle, and end, in 100 words or less. You can find all the Fictioneers’ stories when you click on the little frog. Please read, comment, and if you like, join the fun. Everyone is welcome.

I’m awfully late this week. I’m stressed out from work and had no idea whatsoever, a complete creative blackout. On Saturday I had an idea that ended up with 149 words. I cut it down to 111 and found that the essence of the story was gone and I was left with words without meaning. I was ready to give up, but I miss you people… So I sat down again, started the same idea from a different angle and now arrived at 100 words with the main theme still intact–and understandable I hope.


Image © Sandra Crook  Used with permission for this Friday Fictioneers Challenge only. Any other use of this image requires Sandra’s permission.


It Cannot Be Wrong

He lies there like a ragdoll. Maybe I should let him die.

He’d have killed me in an instant if he’d caught me. Salvaging’s dangerous, the crazed gang kids’ll kill you for sport.

Not this one though. Something broke when he tumbled. His life hangs by a thread.

Damn, he looks so young… he’s just a child. They recruit them early, easier to indoctrinate I suppose.

Can’t let him lie there, I’ll take him to Doc Miller. Maybe he can be turned. We are too few people already.

The killing must stop if we want to survive. People need hope.

(100 words)


I pledge

The title comes from this quote: To save a life is a real and beautiful thing. To make a home for the homeless, yes, it is a thing that must be good; whatever the world may say, it cannot be wrong. — Vincent van Gogh

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41 thoughts on “It Cannot Be Wrong – Friday Fictioneers Flash Fiction

  1. Dear Gabi,

    There’s a saying in Judaism that to save a life is to save the universe. I’m glad you stuck with it. Sorry about your stressful week. If I really were a fairy blog mother I’d wave my magic wand and make it better. Good story…and hopefully, a better week.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thank you Rochelle. It was two months of insane work, but last work was the culmination, so to speak. And now I’m getting my head free again. I like that saying and I think there’s truth in it.

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  2. The main theme seems understandable to me — but now I’m curious (natch) about the longer version, because you never know what parts you aren’t getting, right? Love what you did with the title; that’s a great quote.

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    1. Thank you! I threw the longer version away but it was basically like this: boy surprises narrator while salvaging, description of salvaging and where, description of the boy, mention of drugs, chase, he falls, musing about saving or not… there was also a tree house involved and not betraying the whereabouts of other people… you can imagine how long that got. 😀

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  3. You and I seem to have had similar experiences with getting a story out this week. Yours worked very well. I really like the mood of desperation and the dystopian feel to the setting, as well as the MC’s dilemma. You’ve managed to put so much in there, so smoothly.

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  4. Ever the optimist, I feel like your main character. When offered an opportunity, show kindness and hope there is a reason for change.
    Well done, despite your crazy schedule!

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